Thunder a roar
"thud"
Darkness around
Breathless moments
Am I shivering?
Am I sweating?
Why can't I see?
Why can't I speak?
Why can't I think?
A confusing spell
Yet exciting
Standing under the waterfalls
Drumming on my head
I enjoy being showered up
By the crystal cascade
"thud"
Darkness around
Breathless moments
Am I shivering?
Am I sweating?
Why can't I see?
Why can't I speak?
Why can't I think?
A confusing spell
Yet exciting
Standing under the waterfalls
Drumming on my head
I enjoy being showered up
By the crystal cascade
I can relate to this!!! Nice one!!!
You could separate these lovely lines from the rest with a space, perhaps (just a thought)
"Standing under the waterfalls
Drumming on my head
I enjoy being showered up
By the crystal cascade"
Keep writing!!!
5 posts on a day... wow.. good good ani... keep writing.
the closing lines are really good.